Jacob Santos

Chapter 1 (Test Panel Draft)

To Artists: Don’t draw these panels, this is a draft is for critique! The way I organize the panels is to have 6 to 8 frames on each page. There could be less if the artists wish to draw certain scenes bigger to allow more detail into the scene.

Title Page:

Editor’s Note: This is up to the artists and they can draw whatever they want.

I think it would be awesome to have the main character drawn out in an action pose where he is swinging his weapon up and wearing his armor. In the background, the other three characters in a sort of bowing pose but more like they are sleeping then worshipping the main character (it would be funny because some people would misinterpret the meaning and there would be debates on what the meaning is but maybe not).

Page 1

Panel 1

Scene: Shows [Main character] fighting another Spirit-Keeper. A field of grass with a tree or two. (Editor’s Note: Make sure tree position is correct in each scene. If possible make map to mark trees and use for reference for scene view point.)

Background: [Main Character] is jumping back in mid back-flip and shows a tree and maybe some of the field (if visible).
Foreground: Shows the back of the enemy.

Caption: I am different.

Panel 2

Scene: Shows [Main Character] landing and drawing his weapon.

Background: Show landing from side so show a tree far off in the background [if on map].
Foreground: From the side of [Main Character] show his dagger out and in throwing position.
Caption: I never had the option of choice and if I had…

Panel 3

Scene: Dagger faded movement from left side and gradually more clear at the right. (Show movement of dagger across the panel or movement in small panel.)

Panel 4

Scene: Shows enemy moving out of the way from dagger.

Foreground: Shows the back of the enemy and the dagger off to the side missing the enemy.
Background: Surprised look on [Main Character] face.

Caption: I would have passed but people depend on me.

Panel 5

Scene: Shows the Main character and enemy starting their spells.

Foreground: Show the field and the characters from but close enough to see the clouds. [Main Character] Fire cloud (red or something) circling and arcing up from the ground. The enemy has Earth [rocks, grass, etc] circling and arcing up around the enemy’s body.
Background: Fade from Black at top.

Caption: And for them I will gladly be…

Panel 6

Scene: Shows the Brown and Red mist arcing and circling each other
Foreground: Black underbrush [focus more on the characters] See –scene–.

Caption: A Spirit Keeper!

Panel 7

Background: Black with [Main Character] outline.

Page 2

Panel 1

Scene: [Main Character] House
Background: [Main Character] standing at the window looking down in bed clothes.
Foreground: Kids walking in school uniform.

Caption: Saruwatari’s House

Panel 2

Scene: Kojima knocking on the door.

Kojima: Saruwatari! Come on NOW!

Panel 3

Scene: Saruwatari face looking scared and shocked.

Saruwatari: Oh Crap! (Silent Shouting)
Saruwatari: Coming!

Panel 4

Scene: Saruwatari opens the door.

Background: Saruwatari has the door half open and is standing out with hand still on door knob.
Foreground: Shows the back of Kojima with her arms and hands about to hit Saruwatari.

Kojima: Why did I have to be with the laziest person alive!

Panel 5

Scene: Arm and fist stops short of hitting Saruwatari.

Saruwatari: Alright! Calm down! Sheesh!

Panel 6

Scene: shows Kojima front with her finger out shaking at Saruwatari and her other arm and hand on her hip like a ‘V’.

Kojima: How can I?
Kojima: We’re going to be late because of you!

Page 3

Panel 1

Scene: The two characters walk up late to school.

Foreground: Shows the backs of the two main characters.
Background: Shows the school with name (possible to blur it out with random characters for name). Also shows a man coming towards the two (make almost unnoticeable).

Panel 2

Scene: The man introduces himself to the two.

Foreground: The man in a suit (of some sort).
Background: The school.

Man: Saruwatari and Kojima!

Panel 3

Scene: Shows the two characters.

Foreground: the two characters with a expression of seriousness.
Background: The road and some houses.

Saruwatari and Kojima (at the same time): Yes!

Panel 4:

Scene: the Man again.

Man: The [Chief Elder] wants to see you two!

Panel 5:

Scene: The two characters again.

Foreground: The two characters with their jaws dropped.

Man: … In two minutes.

Panel 6:

Scene: Kojima smacking Saruwatari on the head.

Kojima: It is all your fault!
Saruwatari: (Weakly) Sorry.

Page 4

Panel 1

Scene: The two characters sitting at waiting room at the Town Hall [Chief Elder’s Place] waiting to be seen by the Chief Elder.

Background: Shows Clock at 8:30 [am]
Foreground: Random people standing and sitting.

No dialogue

Panel 2

Scene: The two characters are still waiting to be seen.

Background: Clock at 10:09 [am]
Foreground: Saruwatari standing by the chair Kojima is sitting in. Different random people sitting, standing and walking past.

Panel 3

Scene: Woman walking into waiting room.

Foreground: Shows the two characters from the side.
Background: Shows the women after in front of the closed door.

Panel 4

Scene: Woman in front of the two characters talking to them.

Foreground: The back of the woman in plain single uniform.
Background: Both characters standing up behind the woman. Clock at 10:51 [am].

No dialogue

Page 5

No dialogue

Panel 1

Scene: Passes the office of foreign affairs.

Foreground: The three characters walking from the side view.
Background: Label of the office that says Foreign Affairs

Panel 2

Scene: Walk pass the office of Treasury

Panel 3

Scene: Walk past the office of [Spirit Force].

Scene 4

Scene: Arrive at the end of the hall at the office of the [Chief Elder].

Foreground: Backs of the three characters. The woman in the middle front and the other two characters in the back. Has to match the other three scenes as they walk.

Background: Shows the door and the side of the wall. Label says [Chief Elder]

Page 6

Panel 1

Scene: [Chief Elder] Dismissing his last appointment.

Foreground: Back of man bowing to the [Chief Elder]

Background: Chief elder surrounded by his council. (seems a little Narutoish, need to revise)

Panel 2

Scene: The woman holding the door of the office and allowing the two characters through.

[Up to artists for rendering]

Panel 3

Scene: The characters walking up to the table.

Foreground: the two characters are seen from the side
Background: The back of the side wall (maybe a window and some shelves).

Panel 4

Scene: Shows the two characters meeting with the [Chief Elder].

Foreground: Shows the backs of the two characters.
Background: The [Chief Elder] is hidden but the other council will be visible depending on width of panel.

Page 7

Panel 1

Scene: Shows the [Chief Elder] and his council beside him.

Foreground: Chief Elder and council.
Background: [Up to Artist] Wall with shelves or other misc. items.

Chief Elder: One of our allies is in danger.
Chief Elder: It is your task to protect them.

Panel 2

Map to show villages position.

Panel 3

Scene: Shows an aid handing the Chief a briefing paper.

Background: Man behind Chief handing him the paper.
Foreground: Chief looking down at the paper.

Chief: The village Gedatsu has been attacked three times already.

Panel 4

Scene: close up of Saruwatari face with door in background (if visible)
Saruwatari: Sending us out so soon?

Panel 5

Scene: close up of the council member at the left of the chief.

Council 1: There is no other team who can go.

Panel 6

Scene: Close of the council member at the right of the chief.

Council 2: You are joining Ishimaru and Yoshikuni.

Page 8

Panel 1

Scene: Shows Yoshikuni on platform in front of council members.

Background: Three Council members surrounding Yoshikuni
Foreground: Back of Yoshikuni with arms out [front he has his hands like he is praying].

Caption: Yoshikuni is eleven.

Panel 2

Scene: Show dust forming around Yoshikuni.

Background: back of the stage [could be in house or outside]
Foreground: Shows Yoshikuni with his palms like before and dust swirling around his feet. Not very high at all.

Caption: His Spirit abilities are strong within him.

Panel 3

Scene: The dust and air swirling around him a little higher. [Similar to Panel 2]

Caption: He was impressive enough to join our ranks.

Panel 4

Scene: Close up of Yoshikuni face and the air swirling around him.

Panel 5

Scene: Close up of Yoshikuni eyes open with a yellow or whitish glow to them.

Caption: He isn’t mature enough to fully control his Spirit.

Panel 6

Scene: Back to the Chief and his council.

Chief: They are waiting for you at the gate.

Page 9

Panel 1

Scene: Shows the two characters rushing to the gate.

Background: Shows the town houses and buildings.
Foreground: Shows the two at a distance in a running pose.

Panel 2

Scene: The two characters meet up with Yoshikuni and Ishimaru.

Background: Yoshikuni and Ishimaru.
Foreground: Saruwatari and Kojima.

Panel 3

Scene: Ishimaru, Saruwatari, and Kojima in front of the gate.

Caption: Ranpu Village

Panel 4

Scene: Yoshikuni with red eyes walking behind the other three.